Demon Slayer

Broke down feelings visit me
during the dark hours sometimes
Part of me knows something's not right

But when I think of you
I know the morning will return
bringing all that is new again

Like the dawn has a need
to be part of the day
you come to me with tenderness
intent on being there as a constant

Fixing me with a smile
the demons, foiled once more, retreat
to their dark and unwelcome lairs

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just another silly love poem...

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

Geezer

3 years 8 months ago

You know...

they say that love conquers all. I do believe you have proved the point.
Your title drew me immediately
and I was not really surprised to learn that
the demons you spoke of, were self-inflicted.
We all have those feelings of "What if this is a dream?"
and upon waking, discover that all is as it should be.
I am going to make an assumption that your wife/life partner
is all that you require to assure you that all is well.

The three-line form is enough to give the detail
and the one four-line section is just enough
without a drop more, to give you a sense of relief.
Sometimes brevity is necessary to get the message across.

Nice work! ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

3 years 8 months ago

Thanks Geez! Love has rescued

Thanks Geez! Love has rescued me and screwed me over many times. Think I finally got it right.

Best