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Nov 30, 2021
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AUTUMN IS REAL FUN
Autumn arrives again
trees wind stripped-nudity
gals dance about a pole
shed their clothes like lifeless leaves
they show all lay beneath skin
no fruits dangling
apples and bananas
no breasts
no busts
all cast
as autumn arrived today
oldies too walk about in autumn
like me and you
dance about in the park
semi nude no hat
if trees can show
can't they
all ask me
you can't simulate trees
many autumns all have seen
naked like multi colored autumn leaves
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 7 months ago
Shed...
not shred. Unless you are implying that the wind has ripped their clothes off! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
3 years 7 months ago
Thanks typo
shed
will correct Gee
lovedly
3 years 7 months ago
shred was corrected
still no one read it LOL
LOVEDLY IS NOW OLD
Geezer
3 years 7 months ago
Shred was not...
corrected! Sometimes we just don't get read! I read it! ~ Geez.
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scribbler
3 years 7 months ago
hi loved
comparing the shedding of leaves and clothes works well here.
lovedly
3 years 7 months ago
THANKS STAN
kindness for the read