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Jan 03, 2022
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Midnight song
pause of time:
hark!
through the mid
night
wide awaken birds
sing;
the moon shines
away
— arjiris.f., Jan 03, 2022
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: À la manière de ee. cummings’ “The Red Wheelbarrow”
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Draft
Critiques
scribbler
4 years 5 months ago
Hmmmm
I'm a bit unsure what to think about this but figured I'd let you know I dropped by......stan
arjiris.f.
4 years 5 months ago
Thank you. It’s more like a
Thank you. It’s more like a creative writing exercise, where I took a famous poem and create something similar. Either way, this poem’s concept, as well as its original, is to capture the moment,
to “shoot” a living image.
scribbler
4 years 5 months ago
Hmmm.....
an expanded Haiku then?
arjiris.f.
4 years 5 months ago
Yes, kind of.
Yes, kind of.
Jackweb
4 years 5 months ago
Creative moment
Mostly, creative writers embraces midnight as a preferred atmosphere for creating their thoughts on paper. But here it seems you lost the idea or the subject You intend to write. (E.g) ...the moon shines away!
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