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Tuffy

Reading our books in bed in the early evening
You, a favorite murder mystery
I think you’ve read three or four times
Me, another damn poetry book

Together, we hear a forlorn cry
from one of our sleeping dogs. It was high pitched
So, it must have been from our little guy

We check them both to be sure they are okay
And they are. He probably had a bad dream
You wonder why our little brown fella
felt so sorrowful in his dream
and fret about what you can do
to keep him from being that despondent again

You worry about it for some time
before returning to your book
And this is how I know I love you

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Trying to capture another little moment, which poetry seems so well suited for.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 6 months ago

A snapshot...

of a committed relationship, that brought me a spot of warmth! Thanks, ~ Geez.
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scribbler

3 years 6 months ago

Hi

It is exactly these types of small things upon which lasting love is built. Hmmmm...."that despondent" ....maybe "so despondent"?

Michael Anthony

Michael Anthony

3 years 6 months ago

Thanks for stopping by Scrib!

Thanks for stopping by Scrib!

Funny you should point that out. I changed that very word 3 or 4 times before publishing this. I eventually went with "that" because I wanted to keep the perceived state of despondency isolated to the specific event and moment that spawned this piece. When I tried it with "so" it seemed, to me at least, that "so" might imply that Tuffy was regularly or still despondent - tomato/tomahto maybe??? Does that make sense? I don't know, LOL!

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