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The Obnoxious Moon

This murderous lonely moon
seldom shines in the noon

you have left your habitat
now sitting on our head tight

like a reckless culprit
unveiling his wit

we're not afraid, if you arise
like a lioness that slice

for we have survived the torture
of the sun set when things rupture

look at you, the obnoxious little brat
a dash light only once in awhile act

do you think we can never survive without
whether thy light shine or not we standout

© ® Onyinyechi Cosmos
2:33AM, 4/2/2022

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo, Wole soyinka, Maya Angelou, W.H. Longfellow, John Milton, W.B. Yeat.

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Comments

Triskelion

Triskelion

3 years 5 months ago

Yes

The moon does not always represent romance. It can be a harbinger of doom at times. It's refreshing to read unexpected ides put into poetic form!

Thomas

Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 5 months ago

On point...

Thanks for reading through. Nice pointing out Trisk!

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 5 months ago

I am thinking that...

there must be a legend or proverb connected with this one. Superstition can be a powerful force in the lives of some people.
Very interesting to see something of the sort from another country. ~ Geezer.
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