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Carnal Haven (adult)
Carnal Haven
(Adult)
the climax of my youth
was spent in his arms
where he stirred my inner muse
with slow hands and hungry thigh
he conquered my inhibitions
transforming me into
the keeper of my own soul
together we pushed the boundaries
of the erotic envelope
while prodding fingers of velvet softness
pressed against darkened star strewn skies
the voyeur in me came alive
sprouting wings of passion
from the sating juices of honeyed release
while the late evening breeze
whispered sweetly of night blooming jasmine
in a forbidden lover's garden.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: for Terry Asher who encouraged me to write poetry.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ray Whitaker
3 years 3 months ago
How did I miss this
Nice. Took me to a place that I should hold private...
Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
hello Ray,
I appreciate you having read and commented on my poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
*hugs, Cat
One
3 years 3 months ago
Well...
...I was half expecting a finale with a hooded Eddy Styx popping up to ruin the erotic moment.
Carefully drafted piece of poetry that stirs inner emotions & memories.
A delight to read you,
One.
Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
dear One ;)
eddy will be back today! it is great to see you being an active member and all that it entails, lol. I love your comments. intelligent and smooth.
*hugs, Cat