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Susan & Stan (Scribbler) emulate your favorite poet contest

Susan & Stan (Scribbler)

on a country dirt road
cutting into the autumn wood
they strolled hand-in-hand enjoying
Indian Summer whilst they could

in the dusk of the day
with the dark come creeping,
the last rays of sun
on the horizon seeping.

soon fades over the hill
a blend of colors weep
as the wind moves the weeds
past them into shadows deep.

this side of the wood, in a meadow
grass hoppers and crickets wake
every little bug and critter adds
to the symphony of sound they make

Susan and Stan hesitate, stopping and turn in their tracks,
enjoying a moment of reverence for this "together" time
a squeezing of hands as they face each other smiling
joyous in each others company in a moment sublime.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 3 months ago

You can use...

anyone you like! If it happens to be someone on Neo. or a famous poet or even an obscure one, it matters not! ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 3 months ago

dear Geez,

how did you like my poem? did I capture Scribbler's style?

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 3 months ago

Yes...

I think you did! I like it and I think Stan will like it too. Hugs, ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 3 months ago

thanks Geez,

for reading and commenting. I hope Scribbler likes it. I put a lot of thought and feeling into the choice. I see Scribbler as a classic poet, his writings are eloquent and easy to read. thanks for the vote of confidence!

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 3 months ago

Hi Cat

I think this captures Stan's style and that he will be pleased to have you emulate him. Good use of imagery and rhyme. :)

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 3 months ago

dear Rose Black,

thank you for reading an commenting...as yet he hasn't seen it. you are becoming a real asset to Neopoet :)

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

3 years 3 months ago

Thank you Cat

I am not as experienced with critique but always happy to give a review and highlight likes and dislikes :)

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 3 months ago

they are...

given generously and with a pure heart...and that is good enough...a fair gift!

*hugs, Cat

S

scribbler

3 years 3 months ago

Hi Cat

To be considered a favorite is a rare honor. I especially enjoyed your including Susan as she inspires me in so many ways