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Susan & Stan (Scribbler) emulate your favorite poet contest
Susan & Stan (Scribbler)
on a country dirt road
cutting into the autumn wood
they strolled hand-in-hand enjoying
Indian Summer whilst they could
in the dusk of the day
with the dark come creeping,
the last rays of sun
on the horizon seeping.
soon fades over the hill
a blend of colors weep
as the wind moves the weeds
past them into shadows deep.
this side of the wood, in a meadow
grass hoppers and crickets wake
every little bug and critter adds
to the symphony of sound they make
Susan and Stan hesitate, stopping and turn in their tracks,
enjoying a moment of reverence for this "together" time
a squeezing of hands as they face each other smiling
joyous in each others company in a moment sublime.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Viviana Smith
3 years 3 months ago
Are we supposed to do a poem
Are we supposed to do a poem like our favorite poet on neopoet or of all time?
Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
hey Vivi,
thank you...he is a classic!
*hugs, Cat
Geezer
3 years 3 months ago
You can use...
anyone you like! If it happens to be someone on Neo. or a famous poet or even an obscure one, it matters not! ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
dear Geez,
how did you like my poem? did I capture Scribbler's style?
*hugs, Cat
Geezer
3 years 3 months ago
Yes...
I think you did! I like it and I think Stan will like it too. Hugs, ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
thanks Geez,
for reading and commenting. I hope Scribbler likes it. I put a lot of thought and feeling into the choice. I see Scribbler as a classic poet, his writings are eloquent and easy to read. thanks for the vote of confidence!
*hugs, Cat
lovedly
3 years 3 months ago
scribbler has his own way
about Susan one can't say
as stan only loves
says he
who
Susan
Cats
who else lol
RoseBlack
3 years 3 months ago
Hi Cat
I think this captures Stan's style and that he will be pleased to have you emulate him. Good use of imagery and rhyme. :)
Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
dear Rose Black,
thank you for reading an commenting...as yet he hasn't seen it. you are becoming a real asset to Neopoet :)
*hugs, Cat
RoseBlack
3 years 3 months ago
Thank you Cat
I am not as experienced with critique but always happy to give a review and highlight likes and dislikes :)
Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
they are...
given generously and with a pure heart...and that is good enough...a fair gift!
*hugs, Cat
scribbler
3 years 3 months ago
Hi Cat
To be considered a favorite is a rare honor. I especially enjoyed your including Susan as she inspires me in so many ways
Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
dear Scribbler,
I'm glad you liked it. tell Susan "Hello" for me!
*hugs, Cat