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RoseBlack

Apr 06, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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The Shores of Poe

Ah, yes!
To the eye-the naked eye,
We appeared normal; he and I
Black nights and Raven tress
Ball gowns and tuxedos amiss
Gallant affairs upon the shore

Then back behind the door
He'd drag me; to my chambers
Underneath the wooden floor
Washing my face and hair
Looking me over with an eery stare
Until my flesh fell cold

Silently, I cried through painted eyes
A perfect little poppet;
Black lips that never lie
His living doll; a never ending dream
All that was seen was not what it seemed
Through the stiches, it was hard to scream

Drained of my senses; unconscious
With his hands, he took my final breath
The icy waves; they touched my soul
Embalming my spirit; as the chains fell
Sinking to the bottom, in a lifeless whisper
I vowed to bring him hell

Every night he came
And saw my rotting body
Washed against the shore
My memory lingering underneath the floor
Until the madness ate him alive
Leaving him stranded behind the door

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Comments

3 years 2 months ago

dear Rose Black,

gruesome, but amazing! I think you have captured him. I am a big fan of his, and now you! my favorite lines are:

Ah, yes!
To the eye-the naked eye,
We appeared normal; he and I
Black nights and Raven tress
Ball gowns and tuxedos amiss
Gallant affairs upon the shore

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

3 years 2 months ago

Hi Cat

Thank you for the kind words. I am a huge Poe fan and did some research on his specific style and language used etc. His strange use of punctuation really brought something to his works. I am glad you enjoyed.

3 years 2 months ago

It was...

Chilling, to say the least!
I think Poe would be proud to have you emulate him.
Only one line I would change: "All that I saw was not what he seemed."

All that was seen, was not what it seemed.
Good job! ~ Geez.

3 years 2 months ago

Thank you Gee

I agree with that one line and will make that revision once I finish typing this. Some lines I went over again and again and then left for critique. This took me a few days and overall, I am pleased with the outcome. Glad you enjoyed as well.

3 years 2 months ago

Absolutely...

There is nothing better than a Poe style poem for a dreary night! You have done very well here with this, and I hope to see much more from you, and soon! ~ Geez.
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3 years 2 months ago

Hi Gee

Thank you! A new poem has been posted. I can't wait to hear your thoughts.

2 years 4 months ago

I love POE!!!!

Oh, Sigh, Carrie you caught his essence with this poem, girl this is a masterpiece!

I'm absolutely so impressed with your growth, its truly something I feel privileged to be a witness to.

I wish I could give you a standing ovation. ((((((Applause)))))

You've become the mistress of dark poetry; I am really impressed with this write.

love, hugs & respect Jayne xox

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you so much Jayne

I will wear that title proudly!!! I am so grateful for all of my neo family. You have all contributed to my growth.