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We are all Hungry

Life moves along
With a zero between glow
Like layers of a dream
Sandwiched between
Your fresh baked dread
A slice of make believe
And a tattered memory
The recipe passed down
Generational
One cup of imagined outcomes
A dash of hope
Variety is the spice of strife
What’s your flavor?
In deep hunger
We get lost
As it gnaws on the mind
So the thoughts slip out
You talk
To yourself
No soul goes
without craving
A bite of genuine gold
I prefer turquoise
The nameless bond
Which connects all creatures
Unsettled in the
Present passing
Moment sinking

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Southern California, USA

Favorite Poets: Kahlil Gibran, Rumi, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe

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Comments

Michelle wildmoon

Michelle wildmoon

3 years 3 months ago

Thank you

Hi Mark,
thank you so much for reading my poem and taking the time to comment. I understand exactly what you mean and will consider taking that line out.
With appreciation,
Michelle

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 3 months ago

Firstly...

I enjoyed the little almost cliches; I love a play on words!
I wonder at the line Makeout mouth, I'm not quite sure what you meant
although there is a tease at the back of my mind, that says it means
something like; a platitude? All in all, a thought-provoking piece.
~ Geezer.
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Michelle wildmoon

Michelle wildmoon

3 years 3 months ago

OMG

The "makeout mouth" is a total typo. I am laughing at myself and am thinking about making that into its own poem. Good looking out. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate you.
Michelle