Geezer

May 02, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the contest:

She's Likable... [May's Contest]

I like the dawn and the early hours
I like the morning's dew, opening flowers
I don't like the lonely dark,
nor the slap of hate, leaving a mark

I like the smile of a doggy grin
and the kiss when she comes in
I don't like the weak and tired tales
I don't like when the storm prevails

I like the smell of her perfume
I like the way she leaves a room
I don't like it when woken from a snooze
I don't like people drinking too much booze

I don't like when things have gone wrong
I never have liked things too long
I like the way she sings a song
I really like when she sings along

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

lovedly

3 years 2 months ago

Too many I's

don't these convey the EGO and narcissm in one
Kindly review' Gee

narcissm

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

The contest...

If you read the parameters, is "I like, I don't like".

Let's see how you respond to the title,
before you fire off like a rifle.
One would enjoy seeing if you do
Any better than I
Let us see, how about you?

~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

dear Geezer,

I really like the way you Interoperate the contest displaying your unique style. my favorite lines are:

I like the smile of a doggy grin
and the kiss when she comes in
I don't like the weak and tired tales
I don't like when the storm prevails

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

Thank you...

Gotta love the dogs! I don't have one anymore, and I miss having one. Fun little contest, maybe I'll do another version. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

long before I met Steve, I had dogs and cats. Always German Shepards, but when I met him I just had one mostly white cat with gray ears and tail with one spot by his golden eye(s)he was mostly Bernese his name was Gonzo! (he was a Steve is more of a cat person and Gonzo took to him like a duck takes to water! Gonzo even rode on the motorcycle with him, tucked inside his jacket. he would go for walks with me.(more like a dog than a cat.) yes it is a fun contest. I have done another one, but I can't post it yet! thanks for your comment!

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

3 years 1 month ago

Another job well done

Great job incorporating the parameters of the contest as well as the subtle and descriptive ways you conveyed the ups and downs of a relationship mixed in with random likes and dislikes. I thought the title was great and fit the main idea of your poem.

Geezer

3 years 1 month ago

Thank you...

I tried hard to do justice to the title and make it interesting. ~ Geez.
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