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May 12, 2022
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My Mother
Tall, fair, beautiful,
Wise and thoughtful too
All qualities she's endowed with
Always gives me peace
Oh! mother dear
How much I love you so
For you stuck with my twin and I
Through thick and thin
Like a mother hen
We're safe in your care
Busy or free
She's there for me
Your eyes like that of a gem
Your lips bring forth
Words of advice
As I scale through life
After years of practice
Your hands stir up dishes
Dutifully around the kitchen
That tastes so amazing
Your heart so pure
And full of love
That's worth more than gold
Your smile spreads happiness
That can't be explained
I do have more to say
But I don't have all day
A mothers love is endless
As the sun rises and sets
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is an emotional poem straight from the heart. It tells a true story about a mother's unending, unconditional love towards her family and children. It's also about the advice and moral support she inculcates in her children.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 2 months ago
I am...
impressed with your word usage, and command of the dictionary! Culculate is a word not often used by the most astute native English speakers! Your poem certainly venerates motherhood! I am slowly becoming more aware of the thought process in translating from Nigerian to English. I commend you for an excellent poem. ~ Geezer.
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Kammy O.
3 years 2 months ago
Wow!!!
Wow!! Thank you very much!!
I'm really surprised and shocked about what you said on my word usage and command of the dictionary. I honestly wasn't aware of that. I am now.
Geezer
3 years 2 months ago
You made me think...
that your poem rhymed even when it didn't. I suggest that in view of your work, that you try and write some rhyme. I think it will give you an insight and good foundation for your pieces. Take your time and carefully craft a few pieces and you will see your natural rhythm blossom! ~ Geezer.
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Kammy O.
3 years 2 months ago
This is an interesting angle.
This is an interesting angle. Let me give it a try and see how it looks.
Thank you!
Candlewitch
3 years 2 months ago
hello Cammy,
it is very nice to meet you, welcome to Neopoet!
try this: (it is smoother)
Tall, fair, beautiful,
wise and thoughtful too
All qualities she's endowed with
Always gives me peace
Like a mother hen
We're safe in her care We're safe in (your) care. change (her to your) for continuity
*hugs, Cat
p.s.
it is a very sweet poem...lovely.
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Kammy O.
3 years 2 months ago
Hi Candlewitch,
Hi Candlewitch,
Thanks a lot! Nice to meet you too.
Noted and done the corrections. This way I'm sure gonna get better and better.
Thank you!