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Jun 08, 2022
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LOVELY POEM
Thou shall be more amazed
as you read me more again
I am that light
that candle which
is lit
not by matches
but by flames of those
who ignite
reading my
in-core delight
poetry call it you might
'twill be an universal delight
Poetry is not alone
my birth right
when I am in sight
you read me well
but when the light's gone
you will say
O what the hell
poetry 'twas
O poet
anyone can tell
ere one rings
an alarm bell
poets alone can tell
you also may
if you are blessed
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ray Whitaker
3 years 1 month ago
Liking this
until the end. if you were to edit it somehow, to be more like the rest of this fine piece, ....
lovedly
3 years 1 month ago
Thank you Ray
you walk with me after a a very long day
Happy do stay
Many poems you have left astray
till this day
edit this one as you say
kindly you may
Ray Whitaker
3 years ago
Suggestion
That you either eliminate the last two lines, or place them somewhere within the piece.
Thank you for the opportunity to make a suggestion.
lovedly
3 years ago
Thanks Ray
for a week I shall be away
then do see
if I have followed ye
or let it b
this is not my last
poetic volley
I shall continue to rally
By or out of parental
legendary folly
how else will I a LEGEND EVER B
lol
Candlewitch
3 years 1 month ago
dear Lovedly,
a very fine write, this! I loved these lines;
Thou shall be more amazed
as you read me more again
I am that light
that candle which
is lit
not by matches
but by flames of those
who ignite
reading my
in-core delight
I find myself in them. such a clever write!
*Love, Cat
lovedly
3 years 1 month ago
Thanks Cats
Many liked it thanks again