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Que
Jun 14, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Unmasking

No longer here to hear things said,
Your legacy no more only sadness.
A trail of pain is gained from memories you created.
Why, I want to know.
This scourge of horror tales told unmasking you to reveal who,
Who are you? A brother, a husband? a friend? Or a monster unmasked.
You fooled me, us, them, when?
Full of.ale unveil a predator, my father.
Sorry to say you lost your way.
Your face no more grace, ripped away torn out, by you,
With tales so true.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: New York / Trinidad and Tobago

Favorite Poets: Wordsworth, Shakespeare, Maya Angelo , My granddaughter and nature itself.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years ago

hello,

I would break up these two long lines like this:

This scourge of horror tales told
unmasking you to reveal who,
Who are you? A brother, a husband? a friend?
Or a monster unmasked.

this advice may be used or not. such a powerful poem...it shatters the heart!!!

*hugs, Cat

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Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years ago

Poignant!

This poem evokes a keen sense of sadness or regret.
Heart-rending, indignant, provocation and fury of expression.

In this poem, I truly love your creative energy.

Q

Que

3 years ago

Hello I'm a bit new to this

Hello I'm a bit new to this but thank you for these insights in to my work and rest assured all advice given will be applied.