Neopoem Of The Week Contest June 12 to 18 2022

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MY King

I'm amazed by the things you do
Miracles happen everyday
In my heart i know it's true

Oh Holy one
How you have blessed me
Now I follow your lead
Coming right at me

I feel your heartbeat
Now time had come
To march to his drum

You are my King
MY King Of Peace
My safe place

Bringing us all together
Is our cry
Ride or die
We stand tall
Some may fall
Some may even crawl
But in the end
WE rise to defeat them all

About This Poem

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Ontario

Comments

Candlewitch

3 years ago

hello,

welcome to Neopoet. it is very nice to meet you. read your biography so I know a little about you. I hope that you feel welcome and safe here. I am not a christian, but experienced religious abuse when I was young. I won't bore you with that. your poem says a lot about who you are :) as a person. I hope to read more of your poetry!

*hugs, Cat

Cherriixo

3 years ago

I am sorry to hear you went

I am sorry to hear you went through some religious abuse :( that hurts my heart , but I also want to thank you for your kind words , I am sending you positive vibes xoxo

Candlewitch

3 years ago

thank you for...

the good vibes...I believe in this, very much.

*hugs, and thank you, Cat

Jackweb

3 years ago

Welcome Cherri!

Try and correct line 6:
Now I follow you lead
should be: Now I follow (your) lead

Yes, every Christian should acknowledge the miracle power of our saviour hence we exist in this world. Nothing more than to give him the praise and honour for His glorious acts in humanity.

Beautifully written.

Cherriixo

3 years ago

thank you , and yes i will

thank you , and yes i will fix that , i didnt even notice, sometimes i type too fast .