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Jun 28, 2022
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Me me me.
I hear what you’re saying
Thanks for your share
There’s a lot on your plate
but, I just don't care
my shit is way deeper
all the way to my eyes
I'm still treading water
keeping my eye on the prize
life seems to get worse
as the days fly on by
doesn't get any better
no matter how hard I try
we've all got problems
but mine are worse
your life is a gift
but mine is a curse
I live in America
the land of the free
it's not about you
it's all about me.
John Patrick Flannery
April 2010
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Lord Barham
3 years ago
subject = reply
I like the irony of using first person to describe the selfish solipsism of a lot of people these days. 2010, this is well before Trump, anti-vaxxers screaming abuse at over-worked health care workers and the truckers' convoy and occupation of Ottawa, not to mention January 6! I can't think of any reason to critique it. Seems fine to me!
Rosewood Apothecary
3 years ago
The United States of Narcissism
Possible title? Lol. Just kidding it’s great and poignant. Makes sad and laugh a little too.
“Nothing left to do but smile, smile, smile.”
Tim
Candlewitch
3 years ago
oh wow!
thanks for this, it gave me a good laugh, but it was sobering, too.
*always, Cat
ever, eddy