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Jun 29, 2022
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In-Vitro
A poem-in-vitro is a slick and foamy thing
That will try to slink (or sink) away
So catch her quickly as she breaches, corral her
Across neurons like a schoolboy, wayward
By the ear.
Then drag it to the sunlight stage. That concrete cage.
Of language limpid, livid, living, liquid—
A place of permanence…
Where the ephemeral
Can play
If you but catch a fleeting fraction
Your poem may yet stay
Slick as a newborn calf
On its wobbling way
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
3 years ago
Excellent
Nice work. Poetry about a possible poem. Welcome to the site. I really like
“A place of permanence
Where the ephemeral
Can play”
Excellent lines. Keep up the good work.
Tim
Geezer
3 years ago
Although...
I am primarily a rhyming poet, I see the beauty of this one. I particularly like the likening to a new-born calf. I can se a new-born poem sliding out of one's ear, and falling to the desk as a slick piece of work, ready to nurse at the breast of the writer. ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb
3 years ago
Welcome aboard!
Give peace unto the vessel that is ready to pour forth it's Abundance.
I envisage the great charming power of expression upload.
My regards to your intellectualism.
Candlewitch
3 years ago
hello!
B.A. it is very nice to meet you. welcome to Neopoet! I really like the concept of this poem, and the presentation...very good! these are my favorite lies:
Then drag it to the sunlight stage. That concrete cage.
Of language limpid, livid, living, liquid—
(great alliteration, here) an all over great poem!
always, Cat