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Skye Blue
Jul 10, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week 7/10/22 through 7/16/22

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And from there we burned

We burned
hearts on fire, you were there
while I turned
and saw my mother unaware

my sleeves were long to cover up
what i could only show to you
i pled with her to fill my cup
but she left it bleeding to just us two

but my best friend died
from a few pills at twelve
and god i cried
to the blade i helve

About This Poem

Last Few Words: this is about my history of depression in my childhood and going through the death of my best friend from suicide at the young age of twelve.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Canada, ON

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear Skye Blue,

i am so sorry you have found such sorrow and tragedy at such a young age. I hope it has made you stronger. welcome and glad to meet you!

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 11 months ago

Welcome to Neopoet

I see this is your first poem. Trauma, suicide, self harm, more trauma, a very courageous and honest write. Thank you for sharing this part of yourself with us. I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

Ray Whitaker

Ray Whitaker

2 years 11 months ago

I had to look up the word "helve"

Very interesting piece. Address's the thing of suicide, a tough subject at best.

I really love the "POETS AS WITNESS" writing.

Tis obvious to me that you've put a tremendous amount of thought into this piece.