Neopoem Of The Week 7/10/22 through 7/16/22

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REDrum

Sanguine dreams
Unsuspecting flesh
Crimson nightmares
Rage's steaming flash

Stainless steel
Cold to touch
Vermillion streaks
No life to clutch

Scarlet embers
Blow like fallen ash
Over and over
Until his last breath

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Comments

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

If I were...

the "unsuspecting flesh", I would be very afraid to fall asleep in your presence. Of course, "unsuspecting" is the key word here. I got the message! Brrrrrrr. This is as chilling as any "Killer" story I've ever told! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

3 years 2 months ago

Thanks Gee!

For the high compliment! It is hard to come even a little close to Killer's cold and calculating expertise. I am glad this one sparked a little chill for you.

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years 2 months ago

REDrum

Are you also taking Cat’s challenge and using colors?

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

I may do so...

it seems that the things I have been planning haven't yet been worked out in my muse's mind. She is such a fussy thing! LoL~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

3 years 2 months ago

Maybe

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RoseBlack

3 years 2 months ago

Hi Tim

I did accept Cat's challenge. I decided to step out of my usual reference to black or grey. This seemed to role right off my pen.

Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

dear RB,

the first thing I thought of was the flick "the Shining" and crazy Jack Nicholson (sp?) this poem is an excellent contender for the (Red Contest) my favorite lines are:

Sanguine dreams
Unsuspecting flesh
Crimson nightmares
Rage's steaming flash

and it builds from there!!!
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy