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Naked Autumn Trees
Seeds- Root-Trunk-Branches –
soft feathery leaves
raindrops
small still
Spell bound nudity,
I am the autumn tree
lanky trunk
in cold winters breeze
I freeze...
My bark -like thin skin
tightens---
the warmth within me
I ought to contain
Autumns will come again and again
but for many years
I have to sustain...
My multi colorful leaves
strewn across the fields
still remember me as a mother tree
now stark bare and nude
but still lovely
why has it, its kids now abandoned.
lonely isolated leaves do wonder.
Out in the whiteness of snow
now I stand naked all alone
hoping spring will spring- soon enough
to re-clothe me
I will face many more autumns similarly
so friends abide with me
I stand stark naked
nude yet so lovely
all come to admire me
not birds only...
About This Poem
Last Few Words: PURE IMAGERY
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 12 months ago
"I think...
that I shall never see, a poem as lovedly as a tree"
Trees are the lungs of the world
the home of birds and the little squirrel
A bare tree, without its' cloak or dress
is like a love and tenderness.
~ Geez.
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lovedly
2 years 12 months ago
that I shall never see, a poem as lovedly as a tree"
I hope it's kindness
GEE FRIENDLY are thee
Geezer
2 years 12 months ago
Absolutely!...
Of course, it's friendly! A kindness, if you take it that way! You're always my friend ~ Geez.
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lovedly
2 years 12 months ago
You're always my friend
kindly friend since long How happy I'm you two hold my fragile hand
Candlewitch
2 years 12 months ago
dear Lovedly,
and you are there to appreciate it!
*love, Cat
lovedly
2 years 12 months ago
thanks CATS
Not seen you lately hope you are well
the poem has been appreciated by many
YOUR KINDNESS
Candlewitch
2 years 12 months ago
dearest lovedly, thank you...
having dental problems causing migraines. tomorrow I see an oral surgeon. thank you for thinking of me.
*love & hugs, Cat
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 12 months ago
I dig it
The more I hang around and get a feel for everyone and their specific styles the more I enjoy these reads. This one is really well thought out and conveys your idea pretty flawlessly.
Really great idea, good execution,
Tim
lovedly
2 years 12 months ago
you are wonderful
I have 7 decades experience only off the cuff poetry poet readers like you are friendly thanks be alongside me keep reading-
Ray Whitaker
2 years 11 months ago
Your work lately has been more organized
And I’m appreciating it more and more.
While I like this piece, the last two lines weaken it, IMHO.
lovedly
2 years 11 months ago
Yes Ray
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