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Jul 25, 2022
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This poem is part of the contest:
Neopopem Of The Week July 24 through July 30th 2022
The Yellow Sunflower
Whose sunflower is that? I think I know.
Its owner is quite angry though.
I watch her pace. I cry hello.
She gives her sunflower a shake,
And screams I've made a bad mistake.
The only other sound's the break,
Of distant waves and birds awake.
The sunflower is yellow, small and deep
,
But she has promises to keep,
Tormented with nightmares she never sleeps.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 11 months ago
I like the...
little poem, but WTH are those little breaks between lines?
~ Geezer.
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Ray Whitaker
2 years 11 months ago
Welcome to this website!
I like the piece, and the stanzas form you used.
Is this poem about Ukraine?