Letter to my ex

You cannot find my love in this life
maybe when we stop traveling
through time’s loving wilderness
or you will allow my heart to find yours,
will we both be content till the end

The timeous effort we seem to have made
to be in each other’s spheres
timids in the spillage of tenderness
and the realization that our spaces have
become a vacuum of forlornness

I only love…
and make love in my dreams nowadays
inhabiting the night that brings forth some passion
to my tedious life
while the nightmare occurs mainly during the day

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northern Cape, South Africa

Favorite Poets: Phillis Wheatley

Comments

Jackweb

2 years 11 months ago

Hello Nokros!

If you’ve ever woken up confused — and maybe even slightly aroused — about why your dreams were full of steamy sex scenes with you as the main character, you’re not alone.

Sex dreams are a normal part of life. In fact, it’s relatively safe to say that we all have them at some point — some more than others. Dreaming about sexual activity with someone other than your partner is also normal.
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nokros

2 years 11 months ago

Hi Jackweb...

yes, my friend, life can be a neurotic game. Sometimes you win, sometimes you lose.
Regards
nokros

scribbler

2 years 11 months ago

greetings

Starting each line with a capitol letter can make for hard reading. I like your message but will give you 2 things to consider 1.line 4 try you will allow my heart to find yours. 2. line 13 try using jut night instead of night time................and cold shower before bed time might help lol

nokros

2 years 11 months ago

thanx Scribbler,

for your insight.

Candlewitch

1 year 4 months ago

Dear nokros,

I really admire this poem, as it is neatly constructed with great language usage. My favorite lines are:
The timeous effort we seem to have made
to be in each other’s spheres
timids in the spillage of tenderness
and the realization that our spaces have
become a vacuum of forlornness

*hugs, Cat

nokros

1 year 4 months ago

thnx

for the visit, Cat