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Cherry Flavored Antacids
The rush of that day.
The door opened that I didn’t even know had been built.
I haven’t been the same since that day.
I keep wondering what you were thinking that day.
I keep wishing I could see into your brain.
I so desperately want to know what you think of me.
What went through your mind when we talked for hours.
What happened from then to now.
To go back to that.
My friends think it silly,
Pitiful even.
I wish I could go back to that day,
And fall in love all over again
About This Poem
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Comments
Candlewitch
2 years 11 months ago
hello,
this is one of the better love poems I've read :)
*hugs, Cat
Jackweb
2 years 11 months ago
Nice Piece !
Fantastic romantic poem.
Deeply written from the heart.
Emotive, evocative and longing.
Beautiful!
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