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Jul 30, 2022
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I love you
I've never been in love before
Therefore I'm at a loss
Learning how to think and act
Trying at all cost
Over and over I tell myself
Just give it all some time
Victim to the game of love
Or maybe loves the crime
Even though you are the one
To steal my heart away
You have it now it's yours to keep
I only hope that you'll not stray
Often times we dream of love
That last beyond a lifetime
Under skies heavy with stars
We make wishes as if they're lifelines
About This Poem
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
3 years 3 months ago
Wooo!
Welcome to the site. This is a really good poem. I’m the local romantic here and I love this kind of poetry.
One thing I noticed…
“Or maybe loves the crime”
Should that be
“Or maybe love’s the crime”
Other than that I’d keep it where it is unless someone inspired words come that need to be added. I really think you’ve got a complete thought here. Welcome again.
I look forward to reading more
Tim
Geezer
3 years 3 months ago
I'm thinking...
that Rosewood is right; that you are writing it as "Or maybe love's the crime" Oh, the difference in a comma!
Welcome to Neo. Great first poem here! Yes, I am looking forward to seeing more of your work! ~ Geezer.
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