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Aug 14, 2022
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What life means to me.
There is something in our minds
Like sunshine and the weather, which is not in our control.
I can close my eyes
And feel the tickle of grass on my toes,
Light as the touch of sun and air
I want to be dust borne on the wind
Everything moving, all of the time
Blow freely to the creek where gentle riffles purl lazily on the rocks
Then drenching rain, both stimulation and refreshment to the spirit
Life – as wondrous as it is deeply unsettling
gives me an essential skill for self-preservation
What is natural – birds, beasts, trees,
Flowers, landscapes, seasons;
An awakening to the inexhaustible
Beauty of life on our earth itself.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Obadiah Grey
2 years 10 months ago
Hello there, Boz.
Hello there, Boz.
I like the references to nature, the freedom and spirit you portray.
So much to like but the favourite poetic bit for me was,,,,,,,
I want to be dust borne on the wind,
Everything moving, all of the time.
Blow freely to the creek
where gentle riffles purl lazily on the rocks
Then, drenching rain.
Obi.
Lavender
2 years 10 months ago
What life means to me.
Hello, Boz,
This is refreshing poetry! You have brought life to all the senses. It's so inviting, I'd like to just stay there and visit awhile. Beautiful.
Thank you!
Lavender
I love "...gentle riffles purl lazily on the rocks." Lovely.
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 10 months ago
Yeah this is nice
Just like the rejuvenating rain in the the poem such is the poem itself. Pretty darn good and darn pretty too.
Tim