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Ward C
If you ever go looking around for me
You will find me in a bed in Ward C
A cold feather pillow under my head
Made up of feathers of a bird long dead
Across my body are straps to hold me down
Gag over my mouth so I cannot make a sound
In a bed across from me is a man wearing white
Talks to himself all day and all through the night
They are going to come and take me away soon
Put me in a clean hard bed in my own private room
They will put a long sharp skinny needle in my arm
To keep me from causing myself or anyone any harm
They say that I will slowly and gently fall into a sleep
There will be no one there that is going to weep
They will bury me on a bank where a river use to flow
A place where no flowers will ever again grow
I hope to awake where there is honey and there is wine
So I can quit living inside of my painful mind
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
RoseBlack
2 years 11 months ago
A personal and brave write
Well written and honest depiction of what a hospitalization feels like to the patient. Thank you for sharing these parts of you with us.
Depressed 1
2 years 11 months ago
Thanks
Thanks RoseBlack. It is the only way not to bottle things up inside.
Candlewitch
2 years 11 months ago
dear Depressed 1
you forgot to tell about the nurses and Dr.'s who routinely ignore you and are indifferent to your pain...
a very good poem that speaks to and addresses our level of medical care, or lack of!!!
*hugs, Cat
Depressed 1
2 years 11 months ago
Thanks
Thanks Cat. The Dr.'s are who strapped him to the table and put him to everlasting sleep.
Geezer
2 years 11 months ago
Am I...
the only one who thought this might be about someone being executed? ~ Geezer.
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Depressed 1
2 years 11 months ago
Yes
That was the thought when I was writing it.
Lavender
2 years 11 months ago
Ward C
Hello!
I see that this is a sensitive subject for you. It is very well written, especially in first person. I feel so many things from this, and like Geezer, it feels like someone's final day(s).
Peace,
Lavender
Depressed 1
2 years 11 months ago
Thanks
Thanks Lavender.