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Aug 23, 2022
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Pigeons’ Flight, A Nice Sight
I’m like a little boy enjoying
The sight of pigeons’ flight
They fly off on the clear and blue skies
The skies' vastness is their playground
to pass, dive, and coo to their hearts’ desire.
Look at them; they don't plant or
toil, but our God feeds them.
Not even one of them will fall
Without His knowing.
So, why are we humans being warned
Not to feed them, to simply ignore them.
I still envy these pigeons; why?
They can fly away to their heart's content, and I cannot.
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