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Sep 09, 2022
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The Music
The Sound
The Feel
The Beat
The Lyrics
The Guitars
The Drums
The Band
The Engineer
The lights
The Air
The Smell
The Fans
The Venue
The drinks
The Music
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I wrote this about Music and how it feels to be a musician on stage playing in a band.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
RoseBlack
2 years 9 months ago
My happy place
Because of all those things...makes the hair on my arms stand up. The only place I can be myself!
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Lavender
2 years 9 months ago
The Music
Hello, Herbert,
Yes...to all of this! There is nothing like live music, no matter which way you are facing the stage. Even though this is a poem about memories, I hope you continue to play on stage, if possible!
Thank you!
Lavender
lovedly
2 years 9 months ago
I know many aussies they listen to me
except the first THE SOUND
do delete all the the's
it may appear to sound better poetry
may see
merci
Triskelion
2 years 9 months ago
This is
a good start. If you're looking for constructive criticism, it's something that could be expanded on. Right now it reads like a grocery list.
The bread
The milk
The butter
The cheese
The eggs
etc...
Nothing there for me at all....well, maybe the cheese.
Thomas
Abby
2 years 9 months ago
Good repetition. It's simple
Good repetition. It's simple but nostalgic.