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Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Sep 30, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hurdles

It’s smiles for miles
Through all the trials
I’m high stepping hurdles
With ease and some style

Hurdles get higher
Feet become mired
I’m dragged down to earth
Deflated and tired

Choose naught but to rise
Dry off my eyes
Patch up skinned knees and
Relinquish the cries

The race knows no end
Follows no trend
It’s likely to break me
Lest I learn to bend

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Or “whack-a-mole”.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 9 months ago

I like...

everything about this! Your title, the word choices and the theme. One thing I'm not sure of how to interpret is: "whack-a-mole"
I am perplexed! ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 9 months ago

Whack-a-mole

Is an arcade game where little groundhogs or whatever they are pop up out of the random holes in the machine and you bash them with the padded mallet. They keep popping up and you can never get them all. It’s a metaphor for the challenges life throws at you.

Hey, who reads the authors comments anyway? Lol just kidding with you.

Thanks Geez,
Tim

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 9 months ago

I know about...

whack-a-mole, I just wasn't sure about how you were using the metaphor. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 9 months ago

This is great

The ups and downs and overcoming them when you hit the bottom! Your poems always have such a profound meaning and speak to realistic situations faced by many each day (both positive and negative). Always a pleasure to read. Good job!

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 9 months ago

Love

I love all you so much and as good as I am with words there simply aren’t ones that convey the emotional support I feel here.

You are all kind beyond reckoning
Thanks for welcoming me home
Tim

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 9 months ago

Hurdles

Hi, Tim,
I can relate to this so well! You are a great advocate, for yourself and others!
Thank you!
L
P.S. Unfortunately, sometimes in life we are the mole, and other times we are the mallet.