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FOR THE TIME WILL COME
A time is coming
when men will no longer
beat their wives
but only to cherish and adore them
A time is coming
when women will have the authority
and take charge of the people
and all will be served better
A time is coming
when women's femininity
will now blend into men's masculinity
because she had endured a lot
A time is coming
when women will no longer be
a second-class citizen
but a first-class citizen
For men's leadership has
caused suffering to their freedom of expression
and their constitutional rights
became secretly hijacked
A time will come
when this deep-rooted discrimination
against women and stereotypes
about their appropriate right in the society
All shall come to an end
they shall see the light of the day
their emancipation as women
will be a springboard to assert their rights
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
2 years 9 months ago
Lovely.
I find a wistfulness for a better world so well described in this!
Jackweb
2 years 9 months ago
Wow!
Thanks a bunch for stopping by.
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Lavender
2 years 9 months ago
For The Time Will Come
Hi, Jackweb,
I agree with Ray, this amplifies a yearning for a better world. Your final stanza is wonderful - the use of the word "springboard" is key to a strong ending.
Thank you!
L
Jackweb
2 years 9 months ago
Wow
Thanks a bunch esteemed poet!
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Killer Bee
2 years 9 months ago
All I have to say
hell yes, may this time come and your words manifest an equal and beautiful world to come! Love this piece.
Jackweb
2 years 9 months ago
I
Appreciate your comment! Believe me, it will happen!
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