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Oct 07, 2022
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Reflecting On You
Breathing as a weakness in your imagination
Electric bodies beside the tide, retracting
The words still lingering on your lips
Naturally watching mistakes made
The lapping water remaining in my memories
Drinking the darkness before the fall
The restlessness of the moon above
Swallowed by your reflections
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 9 months ago
It’s like
An oil painting. The paint standing up on the canvas giving it a third dimension. Depth. It’s short and concise and those usually hit the hardest.
Nice job,
Tim