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Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Oct 18, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Choices

I choose light
Though I’ll walk through darkness to attain it

I choose hope
For it carries the tired and wearisome heart

I choose love
Because all else is displaced energy

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 8 months ago

Choices

Hi, Tim.
Wise words, great affirmations, but mostly - the best way to live a life of value and quality. In reading, I seem to naturally change the word "the" to "my" - "For it carries my tired and wearisome heart."
Strong finishing last line and thought.
Thank you!
L

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 8 months ago

I’m going to think

About that little change you suggested. I want to say hope carries everyone’s hearts. Now maybe I don’t. Maybe “Hope carries a tired and wearisome heart.” Realistically for the purpose of verb tense you are correct I believe

Thanks for your continued support
Tim