Neopoet

Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Oct 23, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Genesis (Inception)

The most worthy chase one can partake of
Can only be the diligent pursuit of happiness
With its genesis from a place of self awareness
Never originating in external validation
Which must be a byproduct of the effects
Your own happiness has had on others’ lives

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

More from this author

Comments

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 8 months ago

Genesis (Inception)

Hi, Tim,
Such wisdom, and truth. I really like the way this piece extends outward and inward - not only in your language, but the feeling it brings. It's such a basic premise that so many struggle with and cannot fully understand.
Thank you,
L

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 8 months ago

dear Tim,

I think Lavender's take on it is right on the nose! I really like the written thoughts expressed to make the reader question and reflect on their own motivations. excellent write.

both, eddy styx and Cat