BEHIND CLOSED DOORS

My exclusive moment is divine,
There all alone I was immersed,
Drenched with treasure of light,
For quietude is my supreme life.

The power to live in great thought,
Is ignited through an enablement
Of peace; and the serenity of mind,
Gives the dominion of eternal Bliss!

To write demands a connectivity,
And with a coherence of ideas,
Your mental prowess develops,
Into torrent of emotional power!

Creativity is a magic of thoughts,
If gradually and slightly imbued,
You'll spin across your horizon,
'cause you're the element of time.

Poet's life is like a woman in travail,
It consists of the labor of their time,
His solemn moment of effort is to:
Explode into rhyme or unrhyme lines.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

About This Poem

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo, Wole soyinka, Maya Angelou, W.H. Longfellow, John Milton, W.B. Yeat.

Comments

Geezer

2 years 8 months ago

Solititude...

I think that the mesage here, is that one needs a certain amount of
time to be alone; to construct the lines that become poetry.
I think that you got that message across. You are learnign well, you use English
with much better undestanding than when you first began here.

Only a couple mistakes with tenses.

1] There all alone I [was] immersed

2] prowess [develops]

3] emotion[al] power

This theme seems to be a new constant with you, I'm thinking that you are not finding
enough peace and quiet these days?

I wish you well in your quest for solitude. ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

I will

Always appreciate your time and commenting in my works. Your commentary has added value in my writing. I must confess it. Thanks a bunch.
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Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

Gee...

You're not far from the truth. In fact, you really nailed it. You're very observant. But, about the theme is what i planned to write. Nothing wrong. I'm fine! Just expressing my self in a poetic way. LoL!
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