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Neopoem Of The Week Contest November 13th to November 19th 2022
I Am Done
I am done walking the jungle
Like the pilgrim of the southern
On the pebbles of the river
Under the shadow of the trees
In comfort of the smelling grasses
That drenched with cow-dungs in the scorching sun
I rode the crest of the wave of the pleb,
When cloud overcasted
When nobody would give me a piggyback,
A ragtag boy singing alone,
Splashed the puddles and smashed down the weeds
When I ran like a late school boy.
I am done walking the jungle
With a pet name ‘The King of the Jungle’
Ragged pickaninny in the campus
I was proud of my name since I knew it would soon come to an end
The best time of the jungle was the cold time
When the breeze held me in ransom
With the excitement of the birds
Lowering, curving, and circling the trees
When the dust loomed up
During the sharp time of the year.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is my experience when I was on campus.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Trouble
2 years 7 months ago
I am done
To you my friend I think this poem has a powerful main theme. But Im missing the music . I am done walking the jungle
Like the pilgrim of the southern
On the pebbles of the river
Under the shadow of the trees give me comfort
To me thiers music in that
Mr joghe
2 years 7 months ago
You got it right... Thanks
You got it right... Thanks for the encouragement.