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Nov 27, 2022
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Crossing paths
I could see the center of her agony
Inside her book with her glossary
Stated clear and seen bright
Capture all the meaning in her light
Shine like no other dreamy state
Mind awaiting rest in a neutral haste
Her temple remains high in spirit
Resemble the sky with her poem lyrics
Vibrant as the story of her past
Likeness of the Glory in our Lord, Dad
The soul unites while the childhood is sad
Nights followed by a set of stars
Quite the romance for a long lost heart
Finding the destination, I'm trying so hard!
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Lavender
2 years 10 months ago
Crossing Paths
Hello, Anthony,
Although I'm not certain of its meaning, this poem has an intriguing title and engaging language. The rhyme is sometimes loose, but logical.
I especially like:
Her temple remains high in spirit
Resemble the sky with her poem lyrics
I sense that you are reading a poem and are trying to appreciate its full meaning. (Maybe Dickinson?) Beautiful language throughout.
Thank you!
Lavender