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December 2022 Random Challenge Up On The Rooftop 🏆 Winner

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Up On The Roof

UP ON THE ROOF

I can lay there in bed and look at the stars
My roof has a hole where the rain comes in
After two years my patience is wearing thin
But at least my phone signal has four bars

It’s a dangerous climb to fix missing slates
A temporary fix was to patch with tarpaulin
But lost when the stormy winds came calling
Dare I skip another year and tempt the fates

I’ve asked around for a roofer to call
As yet, no takers and I can’t think why
Up there maybe they think they can fly
But mostly it’s a risk that they might fall

I’ve got a ladder that’s missing a single rung
A scaffold, surely I shouldn’t need to erect
For such a minor roofing fault to correct
In time, will a tale be told or even sung

Not sure how I made it but I’m here now
The slates are replaced, a job well done
This roofing business is just work, not fun
As good a job as my finances would allow

Since then I’ve got a passion for this work
Soon it might even be tall skyscrapers
As I had a publicity photo in the papers
And getting danger money is a real perk

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: w,yorks, UK, GBR

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 7 months ago

My thoughts...

on this, is to rearrange the lines to rhyme alternately, instead of the present arrangement. If you read it aloud, you will see why. I think that there are other changes to be made, but that is just a matter of shortening up the lines by getting rid of some words. All-in-all, I like the theme and the tone of a little amusement. ~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 6 months ago

An interesting take

I enjoyed the story and can imagine looking through the hole in the roof and the overall frustration of home repairs. Nice job.

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Up On The Roof

A unique, creative rhyme pattern, and a very different approach to the theme. Clever storytelling!
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