Neopoem Of The Week Contest December 18th to 24th 2022

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Lady...

a piece of
the Celestial Mother
prevalent
in all womankind
the precious spark
you'll always find
in her lucent face
mistress moon
she is one with
her daughters
flowing
with the waters
of life
like creamy jade
she shall be
my muse
from now
until I fade.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

Jackweb

2 years 6 months ago

Yes ..

I can feel your mutual interaction in this piece. Unique creation with unique selection of words like:
" The celestial mother",
"The precious spark",
"In her lucent face",
"Mistress moon",

Excellence, brilliance is embedded in this piece of writing. Any time your poem appear in a short form, is always a boom (Amazing...!)
.

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

thank you JackWeb,

I'm so glad you liked my poem of the three ladies in this pantheon. thank you for reading and commenting.

*hugs, Cat

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Hello dearest Cat

I don't mind reading this piece again and again. I'm sure I read it and commented on earlier. I thought maybe you've reposted for the purpose of the contest. Any way, I enjoyed reading it. It has a magical music to it.
A competitive entry indeed.
Best wishes dear.

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

dear Rula,

thank you for your response, I am grateful! sorry It took me so long to respond to your comment.

*hugs, Cat

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Lady

Hello, Cat,
This has a smooth, rich flow to it. I especially like the short sentences which make the poem trickle down the page. Creamy jade...lovely language.
L