Neopoem Of The Week January 1st 2023 to January 7th 2023

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How They Remember You

Our lives won't don't last forever
Sooner or later they will all end
And when that time does come
Will they say you broke or tried to bend?

Did you give up or give life everything you had?
Friend, you'll leave a legacy no matter what you do
Your life is your strongest message, make sure it's inspiring
In the end, it's not if, it's how they remember you

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
[This option has been removed]

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Comments

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Dear Shelby

I am an old member returned and I checked your review request and noticed you only want moderate critique.

I think this has the potential to be a very good poem, but I feel it lacks in its language use, I am happy to offer suggestions but not knowing you I am going to leave that up to you.

I think it needs fleshing out a little and maybe adding a couple of more stanzas. maybe even one more?

Nice to meet you!!

Sincerely Jayne-Chloe

Shelby Pryor

2 years 5 months ago

Serene

I'm always open to constructive criticism, I must have entered the wrong critique. If you have suggestions I'm always happy to hear them! Thank you for your comment!

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

hello,

great message you have delivered here. I hope your wise advice doesn't go unheeded.

* respectfully, Cat & eddy styx

Shelby Pryor

2 years 5 months ago

Candlewitch

Thank you so much! Your comments are always so encouraging!