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This poem is part of the challenge:

January 2023 Challenge My Freestyle

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Challenge my free style

Dream big and work hard
Be positive every single day
Your attitude makes a difference
In whether life goes your way

Push yourself beyond the limit
Until you can reach the sky
Sometimes, when you have big plans
You have to just do it or die

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

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Country/Region: United States

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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

Yeah I agree

It’s a good affirmation about perspective. We suffer more in our minds than in reality. Nice neat little package you have there wrapped up nice and tight.

If you have a few minutes could you please take a look at the six poems that have been chosen as finalists for the second half of the yearly contest. Show some support for the poets and vote on your favorite submission. Here’s the link to the voting page where you will find the submissions. Thank you either way!

https://www.neopoet.com/forum/33378

Nice writing,
Tim

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 5 months ago

Freestyle

Hello, Shelby,
Great opening line, and your rhyme throughout is logical and tight. Well expressed words of wisdom!
L
(You may want to switch from Free Verse to Western in the Style / Type field.)

Shelby Pryor

Shelby Pryor

2 years 5 months ago

Lavender

I meant to hit western, guess I hit the wrong thing lol. Thank you for the suggestion and kind words! I really appreciate it!

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

Well done

Such conviction and positive affirmations! Great freestyle!