Tournament Top

In our front room with the world raging just outside,
the string is wrapped just so
With a flick of my wrist the spinning top
races to the end of its tether
Spinning there, waiting for a command
– Walk the Dog, Rock the Baby,
maybe Around the World - look out furniture!

Years of casual practice work to master
my limited repertoire with the rapidly turning top
Its blur of motion and mostly predictable behavior
keeps my sometimes-misplaced sense of wonder
intact after all these years

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Hello 2023! Trying more writing in a whimsical vein...

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

dear Michael,

I really enjoyed this write! how it takes me back years when I still had coordination! thank you for restoring some pleasant memories to me. your style is all your own. ya still got it kid!

*hugs, Cat
*ever, eddy styx

Geezer

2 years 6 months ago

How nice...

to find that reflexes and skill have not diminished, and the sense of wonder can still be felt. I enjoyed the movement required to set the top in motion, and the pleasure derived from an old childhood toy. I am wishing that I still had a yo-yo and something to play with when my hands need something to do, because my brain is absent. Nice job in bringing back a memory of old. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Tournament Top

Hello, Michael,
I think every child in my generation was born with both a top and a yo-yo in hand, it seems. And then usually in the teacher's desk each day. Congratulations with keeping the wonder alive!
L