RoseBlack

Jan 16, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Bloody Matters Of The Heart

False hope
Your mistake
You were warned
About tempting fate

The three words
Most long to hear
Rolled off your tongue
To my wounded ear

You melted the numbness
Made me feel when I couldn't
Broken promises
You will render no more

Lucky for you
I know just where to look
Foolish boy
Playing hit and run with my heart

Squirming is futile
Your screams are pathetic
Duct tape it is then
Now hold still while I twist it

How does it feel
To see your own heart beating
Bleeding out in the hands of another
Are you sorry now?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

Well then

See that’s musical. I’m not sure I can do that one but you have a good sense of time signature whether it’s deliberate or not.

Anyway, dumb ass messed with the wrong woman lol. You don’t toy with the Valkyries

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

Definitely messed with the wrong Valkyrie

He was warned ahead of time and didn't pay attention.

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

And I have had my share

Glad you enjoyed it! Just once I would like an apology...an explanation...something...even if I have to show them their own heart bleeding...enough is enough

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

dear Carrie,

sometimes a girl has to resort to drastic measures to get her point across! what simpletons they are, or is it pride getting in their way?

* hugs, Cat

p.s.
I asked eddy, he said it is a lack of humility and they can't see past the bulge in their pants!

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

I think Eddy is correct

And it isn't like this dance hasn't been done before...but she took a chance and it didn't work out well for him. Poor SOB!

Jackweb

2 years 5 months ago

Wow

Woven with creative beauty. I like the delivery, language and rhythm as well. This is one of your best! Nice job!!!
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RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

Thank you

For such high praise!!! I have had many to learn from...yourself included.