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The Face in the Mirror
As you stare at your reflection
There's so many things you despise
Your weight, or face, or your hair
But your self image is just a lie
Don't compare yourself to others
Their identity is already taken
Embrace all your issues and flaws
Even when your world seems shaken
Don't you see you're a masterpiece
And if this makes it come in clearer
If you want others to love who you are
First you've got to love The Face in the Mirror
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
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Comments
Seren
2 years 6 months ago
Dear Shelby.
Desr Shelby.
I think this is a cracker poem. still? I would like you to be a little more adventurous with your word choices.
This is something that most people can relate to. Do you use a dictionary when you write? I use 6. Depending on the flavour of what I am writing. Just something to think about.
I'd still like to see something longer. These short poems are great. Yet I felt this topic could have been expanded and built on with a few more stanzas.
Sincerely J
Shelby Pryor
2 years 6 months ago
Serene
Thanks for the advice! If you like longer poems, check out the last one I posted. Always a pleasure hearing from you. Thank you!
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 6 months ago
Really good message
Self love is the most important love. Good rhythm and rhyme. Good ending tying in the title.
Tim
Shelby Pryor
2 years 6 months ago
Rosewood Apothecary
Shelby Pryor
2 years 6 months ago
Rosewood Apothecary
Thank you!
Shelby Pryor
2 years 6 months ago
Ekaterina Alexa
I guess this was for me as much as for everyone else, because I struggle tremendously with my self-image, both physically emotionally. I hope it helps somebody!