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Jan 22, 2023
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Overwintered
There are one thousand
pieces to this puzzle
of worldwide birds,
and I have locked together
heads, wings,
beaks,
tails -
dazzling colors
nesting on a pure
white background
where they have
overwintered.
I pull the lid onto
the empty box and
run my hand across
the smooth rainbow
of feathers.
Turning out the light,
I imagine the possibility
of waking in the morning
to an empty sheet of
interlocking fragments,
as a kaleidoscope
of bird song soars
past my window,
then up and over
the drowsy trees.
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Dear Lavender
I didn't know what could have intrigued this piece wwhich is pure imagination and I absolutely love it. I worked out one of these puzzles once when I was a teenager and it was 1500 pieces. It took much of my health then as I spent too much time without leaving my room, exposing to the sun or eating well, but the is worth it. It was a picture of a landscape with a huge cider tree.
Sorry for carrying away, but your poem brings all those memories and more.
Thank you for sharing that.
Exquisite use of the language.
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hello, Rula!
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I love poetry, birds, and puzzles - and so the poem "took flight." I always appreciate your time and encouragement.
L
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hello, Kat!
"A bird does not sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song." - Maya Angelou
Birds are extremely beautiful and fascinating, and I'm glad if this poem led you to explore that a bit. I am also glad you took the time to read and comment!
Thank you!
L
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
There is beauty in each one's eye
There is beauty in each one's eye
so we all see differently
to ensure we don't dwell in an indifferent
mundane world
we all are beautiful
humans
birds
and
animals
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hello, Lovedly!
Absolutely, and well said!
Thank you, as always!
Lav
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
Kindness
Lav
RoseBlack
2 years 5 months ago
I could
picture the birds so vividly.We have a couple of cardinals that visit and sit on the fence. They look so beautiful against the snow. Another beautiful poem! Well done!
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hello, Carrie,
Cardinals are cheerful, friendly birds. Thank you for visiting and commenting!
L
Jackweb
2 years 5 months ago
Beautiful visuals!
I can envisage many birds clustered together representative of species in their unique outlook. Hearing their chirping tunes my muse to create something out of their song. Trees are their natural habitat. Without it, birds won't have the joy to fly out.
A very stunning piece dear poet.
.
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hello, Jackweb,
It seems poems about nature tend to write themselves. I am happy you stopped by.
Thank you!
Lav
Seren
2 years 5 months ago
Dear Lavender
This is a really beautiful poem. I can see the pieces and the the picture in my mind. Its not an easy thing to do in words, To bring an image to life and you have done it with seeming ease and magnificence.
Brava
Kind regards Jayne-Chloe
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hello!
I am grateful for your kind words. Thank you for reading!
L
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Really interesting
It’s quite an undertaking. I’ve done a few. My favorite part was the running the hands over the completed puzzle. I could feel that and the satisfaction of the completed task.
Nice
Tim
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Hi, Tim,
I love to write about the stillness a special moment brings, and the thoughts that follow.
Thank you, always!
Lav