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Jan 24, 2023
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This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week January 22nd to January 28th 2023
Love Story
She never says the words “I'm sorry”
But she reveals their substance
when she takes my open hand
in her way, saying all that is needed
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Another excersise in brevity. How much can you say in so few words...
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Seren
2 years 5 months ago
Dear Michael
Absolutely beautiful!!
This is short but tells a whole story of love
I offer nothing but well done!!!
Kind regards Jayne-Chloe
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Thaks Seren. I was definitely
Thanks Seren. I was definitely trying to see how much story I could put into so few words. I think it worked a bit.
Best
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
Brevity conveys
abs silence
as I say all
Silently
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Sometimes
The words I’m sorry are just words. Changed behaviors or loving patience are better gestures to make amends and empty words ever were.
Tim
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Absolutely, and well said!
Absolutely, and well said!
Best
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
yes...
sometimes words are unnecessary.
*hugs, Cat
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Agreed - thanks Cat! Best
Agreed - thanks Cat!
Best
Jackweb
2 years 5 months ago
A succinct poem
Most times has a lot to reveal yet it is spoken in a few line. Nice job!
.
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you J! Best
Thank you J!
Best
RoseBlack
2 years 5 months ago
Actions
Speak louder than words....sometimes it is a simple gesture that lets us know how one feels. Well done.
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Yes, took me a while to
Yes, took me a while to understand this RB, thank you.
Best
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Love Story
Hello, Michael,
The image of the open hand brings it all together here. Beautiful.
L
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Thanks L, glad you liked this
Thanks L, glad you liked this one. That particular line was the biggest challenge to compress in my short poem. May have worked.
Best