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Jan 26, 2023
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Picture To Hold
I have her picture to
hold since I can't
hold her tight.
I look at her picture
in my hand and I
try to believe
everything is
alright.
My heart is filled
with sorrow,
the pain I can not
bear.
It makes me want
to tear it out and
throw it every where.
Inside in my head I'm
losing it every single
day, I wish I could
just end it all for the
pain to go away.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
I think Kat speaks for all of us
We are here. We are reading and feeling your writing. You’re a talented and welcome member of our community. These are some terribly difficult feelings and writing can help us all to process them in a manner that it is introspective and deliberate.
I can feel your hurt. I’ll offer my ear if you want to chat. You’re not alone in this. We’re all in it together.
Tim
Heather Perry
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you
Thank you for your comments everyone