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Feb 01, 2023
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This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week January 29th to February 4th 2023
World to Change
This world is getting darker by the day
I want to help but I don't know what to say
Those who used to stand side by side
Have let their little differences divide
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It is time to put all our differences on hold
We're losing the battle, the case is getting cold
We may not see eye to eye, but we all know
We're all done for if we don't give this a go
So now it's time for all to stand shoulder to shoulder
It's the only way we'll survive as the world gets colder
I believe this is a pattern we the people can rearrange
So are you with me or not? We've got a World to Change
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
I think that...
many people would take this as a call to action by specific groups. I, on the other hand, will say that it is a call to all the inhabitants of this little speck of dust in the cosmos. Nice job, it sounds like the blurb at the beginning or the end of a movie like Star Wars. ~ Geezer.
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Shelby Pryor
2 years 4 months ago
Geezer
Yes! I agree with you! Thank you so much for the comment and the kind words, I really appreciate it!
Jackweb
2 years 4 months ago
Great job!
What an in-depth expression. A great quill to ride on. You have expressively talked on a very important theme. Bravo!
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Shelby Pryor
2 years 4 months ago
Jackweb
Thank you so so much! That means a lot!