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Feb 11, 2023
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Her
Are you a mirage,
Or a dream,
Are you the cooling shadow of the moon,
Or the fiery kiss of the sun,
Your piercing kohl painted eyes,
Makes slaves of kings,
And crumbles empires,
With one glance,
Your throne,
Is made of the broken hearts,
Of your begging lovers,
That lay at your feet,
While your sensuous smile,
Grinds to dust,
The envious,
For even they are helpless at seeing you,
He is in love with you,
She is in love with you,
And I am the oasis that you secretly desire.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Rula
2 years 4 months ago
Hello C Wolf
I thought this has many good images for someone who tortures others either intentionally or without being really mean.
I especially like the second stanza and especially the refrence to kohl.
Maybe you'd wish to enter this to one of the Neopoem contests.
Just a suggestion.
Well done!
C. Wolff
2 years 4 months ago
Thank you so much!!!
Thank you so much!!!
C. Wolff
2 years 4 months ago
Thx!! :)
Thx!! :)
C. Wolff
2 years 4 months ago
Thank you!! :)
Thank you!! :)
RoseBlack
2 years 4 months ago
Wonderful
Sounds like someone who is tormented by their feelings for multiple people even though they really would like to be with just one. Beautifully written.
C. Wolff
2 years 4 months ago
Thx!!! :)
Thx!!! :)
C. Wolff
2 years 4 months ago
Thx!!! :)
Thx!!! :)
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
So good
Every word is gorgeous.
Tim
C. Wolff
2 years 4 months ago
thx!!
thx!!