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Peevish Poets
When planets glow before Aurora’s rise,
and scattered stars migrate 'cross moonless skies.
I walk the leafy paths that take me home;
I have no inclination now to roam.
I pass the trembling trees, whose leaves have bled,
and share their sorrow over tears they’ve shed.
The dawn is breaking, far off, in the east,
and sounds of sighing ghosts have long since ceased.
Beneath the clouds, upon the heathered vales,
the dew drops wet the wings of nightingales,
seeking solace ‘midst the brightening bowers,
shelter from cruel autumn’s senseless showers.
And I walk on, down old familiar lanes;
I hurry, to avoid the coming rains.
I mutter like a madman, (that’s my age.)
And peevish poets often rant and rage.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: an aging poet, be kind
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How was my language use?
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Good language
I like the vintage feel of the thing. The “grumpy old poet” goes a walking.
Good job
Tim
Blue-eyed Bolla
2 years 5 months ago
peevish poets
Thank you, Tim.
Seren
2 years 5 months ago
Dera Blue-Eyed Bolla
I have to firstly apologise I read this earlier and I forgot to push send on my lengthy message, I really loved this walk. I always take walks with one particular poet in word, he writes of his wanderings, and I love it. To see the world through someone else eyes in words? well you can make it whatever construct you want from their words to your head.
I agree with Tim it does have a vintage feel to it.
Well done!! I don't see anything I would change or edit.
Btw that title is perfect.
Kind Regards Seren
Blue-eyed Bolla
2 years 5 months ago
peevish poets
Many thanks, Seren. I often wander lonely as a cloud... My verse sometimes comes to me when I'm walking. Thank you for your kind comments and helpful feedback on my poor little rhymes. It is much appreciated.