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Neopoem Of The Week February 19th to February 25th 2023

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When We Paint

There is a place
that we know.
It may be a wall of gray fieldstone
covered with German ivy
shadowed in late afternoon,
silhouettes for an inspiration.

Along a path
and to each side
there may be burgundy roses in full blossom
struck by sunlight
filling the air with sweet aroma
where we walk as if on clouds
to brush the sky.

Beyond a canvas on an easel there is a pond.
We are quiet as swallows air dance,
but this will not be our work
nor the children playing with toy boats.

The question comes to mind
of painting present or past,
the future seems just too uncertain,
as we think about the remnants of fallen trees

we decide to paint our portrait young,
what everyone would love to see.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA the bay state, United Kingdom, Australia, South Africa, Nigeria, Canada, Europe, USA

Favorite Poets: Dylon, George Harrison, Leonard Cohen, Jess, Rett, Black Mountain Gang

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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Beautiful

The imagery in this is absolutely beautiful. I can feel/hear the tranquility of your space as you paint. Well done!

S

scribbler

2 years ago

Hello Max

Makes me wish I could paint something other than houses. I enjoyed this but in line 3 I think you should either omit first word or change maybe to may be