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Grief

Sadness I do feel
Greater than an open wound
When a loved one leaves

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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Clentin

Clentin

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you.

Thank you.
My last poem Apple Pie was an attempt at a 10 line poem starting with one syllable.
I like haikus

Seren

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dear Clentin

I felt this poem as well as absorbed it. I lost my Dad nearly 10mths ago and the grief is ever present for me, still. It has been the hardest time I've had since my Mum passed. Your poetry is like an opening flower. Blooming.

Kind regards Jayne

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 4 months ago

Grief

Hello, Clentin,
So acutely descriptive - "greater than an open wound." I feel the sincerity of your title.
Thank you,
L

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Grief

The many stages of grief...but "greater than an open wound" surely sums it up for me. A beautiful, short write that says so much.